Appendix VI. FW1 Japanese L1. Writing Texts
FW1 Japanese LI. Writing Texts: Errors Have Not Been Corrected
Writing 3
Our pet, a Japanese dog, was one of the important family members. When my daughter was 3 years old, we had a small Japanese dog for her because she was our only child and we hoped to educate her to pet him. After he became our family member since he was 3 months old, our life was changed well. She and my husband went walking with him every morning and evening. I had to feed him my handmade food because a Japanese dog could live on plain food. He was always playful with us and behaved so funny and lovely, and we enjoyed to spend time with him every day. I liked to feed and train him because he was simple and never said things against my will. As he was in his house outside, he protected us from strangers by barking. Also, I often brought him to the doctor for Filaria or some kind of vaccine and sometimes for his illness. For those reasons, he was more submissive to me than others. Finally, he finished his life after 17 years in my having him while my daughter was an university student in another city. I was very sad to miss him and I often cried when I thought about him.
Writing 4
While I live in the U.S. studying English is a lot of benefits. If
I couldn’t understand English, I can’t live here, because sometimes I have to spent alone without my husband. I have several experiences about starting to study English such as at the musium, on the phone, and communicationn with people and aloso I can know American caltures through English. First of all, when I went to the musium,which was glass exibition,with IWAP member, I couldn’t understand the tour guidance at all. After that, I was asked by the guide woman what was the most favorite, I couldn’t answer. Secondly, sometimes I have to catch a call, and I couldn’t understand their pronounciation and what they said.
Graduation is next month! I need to make some plans now because when exams start, I won’t have any free time. What am I going to do when I finish school? My roommate is going to take a vacation before she looks for a job. I won’t do that because I need to earn some money soon. I think that after I graduate, I am going to take a word processing class. As soon as I learn word processing, I will look for a job as a bilingual office assistant. It’s hard to find full-time jobs, though. Part-time jobs are easier to find. Maybe I’ll take a part-time job after I find a good full-time one. Or maybe I’ll take a workshop in making decisions before I do something!
My living room facing the slope on the hill is bright and sunny. When I sit down on the sofa in the living room, I can see colorful nature trees outside and I can see some pictures of my grandchildren and my paintings on the wall. So, this room always cheers me up.
I have an extra lamp from Japan in this room. It lights the wall up nicely with small shapes of crescent moons, stars and flowers.
Last month, I turned our TV around so that I can watch TV from the kitchen because I would like to watch the news every day. At the same time, I turned the sofa and a coffee table around too. But it has made the living room feel narrow. I should try out another way.
And Once I missed important imformation for me. In adittion, it was difficult to communicate with peoplr. Last, I can know many interesting American calture through English study.
In conclusion, I can get a lot of information through studying English.
Writing 5
Skipping Breakfast
Why do some people skip breakfast? Recently, people who do not take breakfast are increasing, especially among the young people. It might say rather popular than increasing. When I ask my classmates whether they take breakfast every morning or not, most of them answer that they don’t take breakfast and just drink a cup of coffee. However, it is said that breakfast is the most important meal of the day. There are several arguments for skipping breakfast, despite the fact that skipping breakfast causes unhealthy life style, so that people should realize the importance of breakfast.
First, some people skip breakfast because they are too busy in the morning, and have no time to make or eat breakfast. Most of them sleep too late and awake late, so their stomachs do not accept any foods. My classmate said that if she eats something in the morning, she gets sick. She is unhealthy! To make their brains clear, most people who skip breakfast drink a cup of coffee. But skipping breakfast is likely to become tired when their brain and body run with low energy. Also, some parents put these situations in their children’s life styles. According to Bowden, “Eating breakfast correlates with better performance and concentration at school and work, better energy and improved well-being,” (2009). If we consider figuratively our body as a car, the car engine does not work without fuel, so breakfast is important fuel that we need to get body going and starting our lives of the day. In addition, as French states, “Breakfast is not the meal to miss, especially when you feel stressed, since it can set the mood for entire day,” (2008).
I felt that my living room was being a little bit cold last winter. So
I am going to take down the blinds and put up the curtains on the window this winter. I have to pick out their color from now. It will end up with being more comfortable and refreshed in my living room.
Fertility Treatment
New advances in fertility medicine have created some social problems recently.
At the end of this January, Octomom was reported at the California hospital. It was almost certain that the woman was undergoing fertility treatment. There are enormous risks that fertility medicine will cause: increasing in multiple births, and birth defects.
First, due to the fertility medicine, multiple births are increasing. Multiple births have led to enormous risks on medical problems and development troubles for babies. As a result of these risks, the family has to be put under great emotional strain, including financial problems. For example, a mother of multiple births can not care them by herself. It is obvious that she has to depend on others. In fact, Octomom has already depend on her mother to care other six children, and her mother has been tired and felt so stressful about caring her multiple grandchildren. Although new babies has been caring by six nurses to gain weight faster now, imitating the way of the mother to hold babies, the family is put in the nervous situations. Moreover, the family spends much money for their daily diapers, clothes, and food, also for medical treatments. By the way, it was reported that they need about 23,000 diapers a year, which is the number of eight times diapers per a baby.
1 agree with these opinions. We need more energy, clear brain, and concentration for studying hard. Also, if parents want their children to do better at school, it is better to make their lifestyles eating breakfast. Think about how to retain our healthy conditions not only a day, but also for a long term. Moreover, the communication with family through breakfast affects good beginning to start the day.
Secondly, skipping breakfast is considered as a common strategy for losing weight, especially among women. Some people believe that they will loose weight if they skip meals. In this point, breakfast is an easy target to skip. But it is not true. In fact, I have an experience that if I skipped only a meal, my weight decreased a little bit soon, but my body fat didn’t decrease. Some experts say that eating breakfast is rather good for weight loss. According to Campbell, “In fact, data from the National Weight Control Registry, an ongoing study of over 5,000 people who have lost weight and maintained a weight loss of at least 30 pounds for one year or more, shows that one key factor for these people’s success is that almost all eat breakfast. On theory is that eating breakfast kick-starts your metabolism, helping your body start burning food for fuel,” (2007). Also, as Gardner states, “An estimated 12 percent to 34 percent of children and adolescents skip breakfast on a regular basis, a number that increases with age. Previous studies have linked breakfast skipping with a great tendency to gain weight,” (2008). We can imagine that if people made arbitrary skipping breakfast, there is a possibility that they might run too much eating for lunch as a reaction or tend toward having high sugar foods. If so, it causes unbalanced eating habit. As the result, they become to gain weight. Furthermore, it could be lead to obesity. We need good balanced eating habit to maintain our weight without skipping breakfast.
In addition, there is a possibility' of birth defects because of multiple babies. Most of them are tiny and premature birth for protecting mother’s health condition. Embryos have to share the situation in mother’s womb, only one of them is blessed with the quality to live in mother’s womb normally, so some babies are involved in a lack of enough nutrition or oxygen through their mother. Therefore it is inevitable that multiple births cause the birth defects. As Fernandez states, “Infants conceived as a result of infertility treatment are two to four times more likely to have certain types of birth defects than children conceived naturally, according to one of the nation’s largest studies on the issue (2008). The study shows that the defects includes heart problems, cleft lip, cleft palate and abnormalities in the esophagus or rectum. The Octomom has already three birth defects and a new baby who is in the serious condition from the beginning. Birth defects also result in medical problems and development troubles for babies for long term; Consequently, caring for babies depends on many social programs.
In brief, new advance in fertility medicine have caused serious risks instead of benefiting infertile couples. Increases in multiple births and birth defects imply that family and social have to compensate with tremendous tasks.
Works Cited
ANON_NAME_0 Fernandez. More birth defects seen with fertility treatment. Nov. 18, 2008
On the other hands, some people who have health problems have to skip breakfast. As additional Campbell states, “It’s not uncommon for dietitians to hear patients say, 'If I eat breakfast, I’m hungry all day.’ Like wise, many people skip breakfast in an effort to lose weight. Some people with diabetes don’t eat breakfast because they wake up with high blood glucose readings in the morning. What are your reasons for no eating break fast?” In addition, “Even the name “breakfast” implies that you are breaking the long overnight fast with a nourishing meal to help you face the day,” (2007). However, some people who don’t eat breakfast show their healthy conditions. If they continue to keep skipping breakfast, are their bodies accustomed to being good conditions? Then, why do most experts insist the importance of eating breakfast?
If we consider about the mechanism of our body, skipping breakfast is not inherent for our body, because there is a mechanism of body functions. In the thinking way of oriental medicine, I learned about it very long ago, human’s functions such as five solid organs and six hollow organs have the best time to work vigorously a day. For example, the liver works in midnight actively, the lungs work at cockcrow etc. Although we have adaptability' to a new situation, skipping breakfast disobeys the natural stream of body functions and it will cause some different changes to the body in the future.
I believe that it is better to follow to natural stream of our body functions.
Finally, most people of skipping breakfast feel nothing about the importance of eating breakfast, and persist their life styles unconsciously. But breakfast is very important issue, as most experts recommend. Of course, it should be balanced meal. At the same time, Most people are tend to take dinner as the main meal in a day, but I think that it is better to eat the most balanced, qualified breakfast for energy in a day. Someday, an ELI teacher gave us a homework that we should take enough sleeping and good breakfast before a day taking a final test, because these are very important for keeping clear brain, especially for language. Sleeping gives our brain rest and good breakfast gives our brain enough nutrition. We should know these real clues for studying, also other people who skip breakfast too.
Briefly, a lot of people skip breakfast, but skipping breakfast can just save time in the busy morning, and has no benefits for our healthy life style. People who don’t eat breakfast should recognize that breakfast is very important.
Works Cited
Jonny Bowden. Eating breakfast is only half the story. Feb.02.2009
Gerri French. Making time for breakfast. Sep. 22, 2008
Amy Campbell. Getting off to a good with breakfast: part 1.
May 14, 2007
Amanda Gardner. Skip breakfast, pack on the pounds. Mar. 03, 2008
